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~Aranel~
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~Fear~
« Thread Started on Aug 10, 2005, 10:17pm »

Where am I?
I can't hardly,
breathe.
What is going on ?
I want to go home.
I can't stand this,
I just want to leave,
I feel so all alone.

I feel so cold,
my body
hurts so bad.
I can't hardly move.
Im so scared,
what's happening?
I don't know,
what to do.

What is this,
I feel down there?
Something's by,
my side.
I pick it up and
realize,
it's a lighter by my side.

Finally I get it lit.
Then I realize,
im going to die.
Death is here,
no matter what I do,
cause I have been,
buried "alive."

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Lately, I have had the strangest feeling
With no vivid reason here to find
Yet the thought of losing you’s been hanging
’round my mind

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Re: ~Fear~
« Reply #1 on Aug 10, 2005, 10:20pm »

a very good write had me all the way to the end..great job...we all have fears ik now but this is one i am glad i dont have...great job JIM

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« Reply #2 on Aug 10, 2005, 10:22pm »

Thanks! I watched a show tonight that freaked me out about being buried alive!! Gives me shivers!! Yuck!!

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Lately, I have had the strangest feeling
With no vivid reason here to find
Yet the thought of losing you’s been hanging
’round my mind

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« Reply #3 on Aug 11, 2005, 12:51am »

~This was truly awesome, Knowing Ive been there a few times in my life~ excellent work~

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Re: ~Fear~
« Reply #4 on Aug 12, 2005, 2:29am »

Sarah,
There's an emotional way to look at this too, more than just a rendering of what you saw on the tv show. That part was very powerful.
Awesome work.

-- Jus

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Soaks my skin through to the bone,
pain is nothing that a downpour won't erase.
Rain - you can't hold onto it.
A treasure you cannot break.
Rain - so now I'm drawn to it.
I feel engaged, one and the same.
When heaven's dressing beads off of my face,
then pain is nothing that a downpour won't erase.

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Re: ~Fear~
« Reply #5 on Aug 12, 2005, 9:42am »

Thanks so much ~Jus~

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Lately, I have had the strangest feeling
With no vivid reason here to find
Yet the thought of losing you’s been hanging
’round my mind

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Re: ~Fear~
« Reply #6 on Sept 5, 2005, 2:57pm »

That is a good, stark, hard-hitting poem

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bu mhath an sgathan suil caraid

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Re: ~Fear~
« Reply #7 on Sept 19, 2005, 7:33am »

Thanks!

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Lately, I have had the strangest feeling
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Yet the thought of losing you’s been hanging
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Re: ~Fear~
« Reply #8 on Jan 16, 2006, 9:08pm »

sarah this was a very strong peom it really means alot to me caue i feel like im suffercating all the time like im being burried alive. i love you sis and this was a awsome poem

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